Once upon a time while I was walking the lonely run-down city. I suddenly stumbled across a T Rex. I screamed and ran to hide behind the broken car. While I was hiding I could hear the sound of the T Rex thumping his big feet towards me. So I quickly ran so fast and found another place to hide, it was a big tower. Once I got to the top I could watch where the T Rex was going. He kept thumping and roaring trying his best to find me. Then I yelled out ¨You cant get me¨ . He turned and heard me and saw that I was up the top of the tower and he began to run towards me. He then got to the tower and he jumped up and pulled on my legs I then fell to the ground with nowhere to go. I was eaten up by the T Rex.
Oh no! You have done well to write the ending of your story even though you were eaten! Great sequencing of your ideas. Maybe next time add some "feelings" words about how you felt at different times in the story.
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